Could use some help.

[alexa071]

vision to travel and talk to youth ... Giving them opportunity to explore themselves

You might want to SPECIFICALLY rewrite this passage in your "about" section. I understand what you are trying to say but it comes across as a bit creepy.

What makes Corey different from other speaks? Answer is simple, he's Corey.

I think you need to set yourself apart more than just saying that you are a different person. Your arguments following that statement could use some bolstering.

Also... count me in for changing to 1st person and there are a lot of spelling and grammatical errors that need to be fixed.

Good luck!

Randy